This was written, shot and edited for the Dallas 48hr film contest 2011. The film had to include the following elements: Character: Dennis or Debbie Karlsen, Waiter or Waitress. Prop: a ball. Line of Dialogue: "When do you need it?". The genre selected was Thriller/Suspense.
Here is the 48 Hour film version
Alan Tregoning & Jason Walter Vaile
INT. PIZZA PARLOUR-DAY A young waitress trudges down a staircase. Her name tag reads: DEBBIE. She tosses her tray and apron on the counter. ZINI (O.S.) Karlsen! DEBBIE I'm off. Zini walks out of the kitchen wiping his hands. ZINI (CONT'D) Delivery. DEBBIE Since when's that my job? Where's Brandon? ZINI Douche bag called in sick again. DEBBIE What about my daughter? It's my weekend. ZINI Whatever. Slides the pizza bag to her. EXT. MANSION-DAY INSERT ADDRESS BLOCK: 5107 KELSEY RD Pull back to reveal...A finely crafted stately manor. INT. KELSEY-DAY MATT, a dad in his forties, whips through the family room gathering his briefcase and jacket. His daughter, TENNA, is flopped on the couch glued to the TV watching SANCTUARY. Her nanny, TAMARA, is texting on her phone. People are being shot and dying on the show. Matt sees the violence. MATT Seriously? He turns it off. TENNA Hey. SFX: DOOR BELL Tamara is oblivious and continues texting. MATT Why don't I get that? Pizza's here, go wash up. Tenna begrudgingly stomps off. SFX: PHONE RINGS Matt answers MATT Yeah, I'm out the door. INT. ENTRY-CONTINUOUS Matt is opening the door and getting out his wallet. He opens the door to reveal not a pizza girl but DOUG and NICOLE. MATT Are you kidding me? When do you need it? DOUG How about right now? Nicole steps forward and pops Matt right in the face with her fist. Matt falls unconscious to the entry floor. Nicole nods towards the study. NICOLE Get him in there. INT. KITCHEN-CONTINOUS Tamara is still texting away. Suddenly a knife is held up to her throat. Tamara looks up and is about to scream. Nicole holds her finger to her lips. NICOLE Shhhhh. She gently takes the phone from Tamara. She slides some zip ties on her hands. IN THE HALLWAY Doug drags Matt towards the study. IN THE KITCHEN Nicole is typing on the console in the kitchen. Brings up the security cameras and sees a car pull into the drive way. NICOLE We're about to have some company. INT. STUDY-CONTINUOUS Doug is distracted by the signed baseballs on the mantle. DOUG Mantle. Ruth. Josh Hamilton!! He plucks that one from the mantle. He turns to see Debbie looking at the unconscious Matt on the floor and up to him. He holds the ball up for her to see. DOUG (CONT'D) It's a Josh Hamilton. Debbie turns to run. But Nicole is blocking the front door. NICOLE Behave. Debbie stares at the knife for a beat, what can she do... Debbie clobbers Nicole in the face with the pizza bag and dashes up the stairs. INT. MECHANICAL CLOSET-CONTINUOUS Debbie runs in and slams the door shut. She looks around. Dead end. There is a large tower of electronic equipment in one corner. An access door in the other. She looks out the access door into the attic and sees a small walkway. As Debbie closes the access door behind her, Nicole opens the closet door. She sees the equipment tower. NICOLE (Shouting) I found it. Bring your laptop. INT. ATTIC-CONTINUOUS Debbie crawls through the small walkway. INT. MECHANICAL CLOSET-CONTINUOUS Doug walks in. Sees the equipment. DOUG Bingo! He cracks his knuckles and jacks in. INT. ATTIC-CONTINUOUS Debbie pops out in another bigger attic area. She finds another door back into the house. She peaks out, the coast is clear. Across the hall is a bedroom with a balcony. INT. ATTIC-CONTINUOUS Nicole is crawling through the small space Debbie began in. INT. BEDROOM-DAY Debbie darts across the hall to the bedroom. She peaks out the balcony and can see her car below. A small whimper comes from under the bed. Debbie spins to see Tenna hiding behind the bed crying. She is torn, does she make a break for the balcony or help Tenna. DEBBIE It's OK. I'm not one of them. She reaches for the balcony doors. TENNA They're locked. DEBBIE So how do we get out? Tenna points to a control panel on the nightstand. It has a schematic of the floor plan. TENNA Maybe the garage? Nicole pops out of the closet. Debbie shoves Tenna down. NICOLE (Shouting) She's loose. Lock it down. IN THE MACHINE ROOM DOUG I'm on it. Alarm count down begins. INT. BACK STAIRS-CONTINUOS Debbie and Tenna sneak down. Tamara is bound to a chair. DEBBIE Open the garage, I'll get her. Debbie frees Tamara. The count down on alarm is still ticking. Garage door is opening. INT. UPSTAIRS-CONTINUOUS Nicole looks out the window and sees the door opening. NICOLE Shut the North Garage door! INT. MECHANICAL CLOSET-CONTINUOUS Doug hits some buttons. INT. GARAGE-CONTINUOUS Debbie, Tenna and Tamara see the door begin to close. Debbie shoves them in front. DEBBIE Get out. Get help! She shoves them under the door ala Indiana Jones. Debbie can't make it. The door closes. INT. LIVING ROOM-CONTINUOUS Debbie creeps around cautiously. She picks up a praying monk statue for protection. INT. MECHANICAL CLOSET-CONTINUOUS Doug is typing away. DOUG Done. Transfer complete. Lets get out of here. Doug snaps the laptop shut. INT. KELSEY-DAY Debbie stalks around the room, monk statue poised and ready. INT. STAIRS-CONTINUOUS Doug charges down the stairs. DOUG Let's go. Let's go. Doug almost runs into Debbie at the bottom of the stairs. Debbie clobbers him with the monk statue. Lays him out. The ball rolls out of his pocket. CLICK. Debbie turns to find Nicole aiming a gun at her. NICOLE I thought I told you to behave. Matt groans distracting Nicole. Debbie grabs the baseball and pegs it at Nicole's head. Nicole staggers back. Debbie steps forward and pops Nicole in the face, knocking her out cold. She grabs the gun and trains it on Nicole. Matt looks up at Debbie. MATT Are you a cop? DEBBIE No, I'm just the waitress. FADE TO BLACK.