Delivered (2011)
This was written, shot and edited for the Dallas 48hr film contest 2011.
The film had to include the following elements: Character: Dennis or
Debbie Karlsen, Waiter or Waitress. Prop: a ball. Line of Dialogue:
"When do you need it?". The genre selected was Thriller/Suspense.
Here is the 48 Hour film version
Delivered from Alan Tregoning on Vimeo.
Delivered
by
Alan Tregoning & Jason Walter Vaile
INT. PIZZA PARLOUR-DAY
A young waitress trudges down a staircase. Her name tag
reads: DEBBIE. She tosses her tray and apron on the counter.
ZINI (O.S.)
Karlsen!
DEBBIE
I'm off.
Zini walks out of the kitchen wiping his hands.
ZINI (CONT'D)
Delivery.
DEBBIE
Since when's that my job? Where's
Brandon?
ZINI
Douche bag called in sick again.
DEBBIE
What about my daughter? It's my
weekend.
ZINI
Whatever.
Slides the pizza bag to her.
EXT. MANSION-DAY
INSERT ADDRESS BLOCK: 5107 KELSEY RD
Pull back to reveal...A finely crafted stately manor.
INT. KELSEY-DAY
MATT, a dad in his forties, whips through the family room
gathering his briefcase and jacket. His daughter, TENNA, is
flopped on the couch glued to the TV watching SANCTUARY. Her
nanny, TAMARA, is texting on her phone. People are being
shot and dying on the show. Matt sees the violence.
MATT
Seriously?
He turns it off.
TENNA
Hey.
SFX: DOOR BELL
Tamara is oblivious and continues texting.
MATT
Why don't I get that? Pizza's
here, go wash up.
Tenna begrudgingly stomps off.
SFX: PHONE RINGS
Matt answers
MATT
Yeah, I'm out the door.
INT. ENTRY-CONTINUOUS
Matt is opening the door and getting out his wallet. He opens
the door to reveal not a pizza girl but DOUG and NICOLE.
MATT
Are you kidding me? When do you
need it?
DOUG
How about right now?
Nicole steps forward and pops Matt right in the face with her
fist. Matt falls unconscious to the entry floor. Nicole
nods towards the study.
NICOLE
Get him in there.
INT. KITCHEN-CONTINOUS
Tamara is still texting away. Suddenly a knife is held up to
her throat. Tamara looks up and is about to scream. Nicole
holds her finger to her lips.
NICOLE
Shhhhh.
She gently takes the phone from Tamara. She slides some zip
ties on her hands.
IN THE HALLWAY
Doug drags Matt towards the study.
IN THE KITCHEN
Nicole is typing on the console in the kitchen. Brings up
the security cameras and sees a car pull into the drive way.
NICOLE
We're about to have some company.
INT. STUDY-CONTINUOUS
Doug is distracted by the signed baseballs on the mantle.
DOUG
Mantle. Ruth. Josh Hamilton!!
He plucks that one from the mantle. He turns to see Debbie
looking at the unconscious Matt on the floor and up to him.
He holds the ball up for her to see.
DOUG (CONT'D)
It's a Josh Hamilton.
Debbie turns to run. But Nicole is blocking the front door.
NICOLE
Behave.
Debbie stares at the knife for a beat, what can she do...
Debbie clobbers Nicole in the face with the pizza bag and
dashes up the stairs.
INT. MECHANICAL CLOSET-CONTINUOUS
Debbie runs in and slams the door shut. She looks around.
Dead end. There is a large tower of electronic equipment in
one corner. An access door in the other. She looks out the
access door into the attic and sees a small walkway.
As Debbie closes the access door behind her, Nicole opens the
closet door. She sees the equipment tower.
NICOLE
(Shouting)
I found it. Bring your laptop.
INT. ATTIC-CONTINUOUS
Debbie crawls through the small walkway.
INT. MECHANICAL CLOSET-CONTINUOUS
Doug walks in. Sees the equipment.
DOUG
Bingo!
He cracks his knuckles and jacks in.
INT. ATTIC-CONTINUOUS
Debbie pops out in another bigger attic area. She finds
another door back into the house. She peaks out, the coast
is clear. Across the hall is a bedroom with a balcony.
INT. ATTIC-CONTINUOUS
Nicole is crawling through the small space Debbie began in.
INT. BEDROOM-DAY
Debbie darts across the hall to the bedroom. She peaks out
the balcony and can see her car below. A small whimper comes
from under the bed. Debbie spins to see Tenna hiding behind
the bed crying. She is torn, does she make a break for the
balcony or help Tenna.
DEBBIE
It's OK. I'm not one of them.
She reaches for the balcony doors.
TENNA
They're locked.
DEBBIE
So how do we get out?
Tenna points to a control panel on the nightstand. It has a
schematic of the floor plan.
TENNA
Maybe the garage?
Nicole pops out of the closet. Debbie shoves Tenna down.
NICOLE
(Shouting)
She's loose. Lock it down.
IN THE MACHINE ROOM
DOUG
I'm on it.
Alarm count down begins.
INT. BACK STAIRS-CONTINUOS
Debbie and Tenna sneak down. Tamara is bound to a chair.
DEBBIE
Open the garage, I'll get her.
Debbie frees Tamara. The count down on alarm is still
ticking. Garage door is opening.
INT. UPSTAIRS-CONTINUOUS
Nicole looks out the window and sees the door opening.
NICOLE
Shut the North Garage door!
INT. MECHANICAL CLOSET-CONTINUOUS
Doug hits some buttons.
INT. GARAGE-CONTINUOUS
Debbie, Tenna and Tamara see the door begin to close. Debbie
shoves them in front.
DEBBIE
Get out. Get help!
She shoves them under the door ala Indiana Jones. Debbie
can't make it. The door closes.
INT. LIVING ROOM-CONTINUOUS
Debbie creeps around cautiously. She picks up a praying monk
statue for protection.
INT. MECHANICAL CLOSET-CONTINUOUS
Doug is typing away.
DOUG
Done. Transfer complete. Lets get
out of here.
Doug snaps the laptop shut.
INT. KELSEY-DAY
Debbie stalks around the room, monk statue poised and ready.
INT. STAIRS-CONTINUOUS
Doug charges down the stairs.
DOUG
Let's go. Let's go.
Doug almost runs into Debbie at the bottom of the stairs.
Debbie clobbers him with the monk statue. Lays him out. The
ball rolls out of his pocket.
CLICK. Debbie turns to find Nicole aiming a gun at her.
NICOLE
I thought I told you to behave.
Matt groans distracting Nicole. Debbie grabs the baseball
and pegs it at Nicole's head. Nicole staggers back. Debbie
steps forward and pops Nicole in the face, knocking her out
cold. She grabs the gun and trains it on Nicole.
Matt looks up at Debbie.
MATT
Are you a cop?
DEBBIE
No, I'm just the waitress.
FADE TO BLACK.
